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This where you tell me:

→ How my character is faring.
→ How the structure of my character is
→ What I am doing wrong.
→ What I can do to improve.
→ What I excel at
→ My weaknesses and stuff
→ Anything else you want to tell me about
→ Constructive criticism only, please don't flame me.



Date: 2009-01-13 05:54 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] greennotgold
I don't know your character's canon so I can't comment on that (I'm sure she's fine or she wouldn't have gotten in, though) but I wanted to mention that, well... in this post you misspelled "structure", and you seem to randomly capitalize words that don't need to be... Like in her profile you say "She could Use Basic Fonic Artes, and Powerful Strike Artes". I'm don't know whether "Fonic Artes" and "Strike Artes" should be capitalized, (or whether "Basic" and "Powerful" should), but "Use" definitely shouldn't.

So I'd just recommend proofreading a little more thoroughly, nothing major! ♥ Welcome to Daisychain!

Date: 2009-01-13 05:58 am (UTC)
greennotgold: (Default)
From: [personal profile] greennotgold
No problem! I hope I didn't come off as rude or anything.

Good luck!

Date: 2012-01-17 06:54 am (UTC)
relinquishing: (☼ It's always darkest)
From: [personal profile] relinquishing
Just a little nitpicky note from one of your castmates~

Be careful with your grammar. As fun as your tags can become, it sometimes can be hard to follow the flow of Anise's ideas, and her voice can be drowned out in the process. Make sure you're reading through your posts and double-checking for typos and comma placement - it can make or break her voice, and we want to be able to hear Anise through your posts, not just Tarei! :)

Date: 2012-01-17 07:53 am (UTC)
redeyed_devilx: (Default)
From: [personal profile] redeyed_devilx
Thanks for the heads up. It's been a long time since I've played her so definitely I am aware of some flaws and yeah I do have grammar issues. I'll work a little harder on them this time around. Thanks for your input. It's nice to get helpful crit.


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