Date: 2009-01-13 05:54 am (UTC)
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From: [personal profile] greennotgold
I don't know your character's canon so I can't comment on that (I'm sure she's fine or she wouldn't have gotten in, though) but I wanted to mention that, well... in this post you misspelled "structure", and you seem to randomly capitalize words that don't need to be... Like in her profile you say "She could Use Basic Fonic Artes, and Powerful Strike Artes". I'm don't know whether "Fonic Artes" and "Strike Artes" should be capitalized, (or whether "Basic" and "Powerful" should), but "Use" definitely shouldn't.

So I'd just recommend proofreading a little more thoroughly, nothing major! ♥ Welcome to Daisychain!
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